Alex's writing

   For this blog I will show you some of my writing   And it's a play called Musem madness!!!. And it's 8 pages long so sorry about this.So I hope you can tell me what's good  what needs improving and what's good. So the story is about 2 boys and 2 girls

And when they go into the museum they bump into a golden statue. 

             Museum Madness !!!

Teacher : Ok can everyone please walk single file to the school bus. 

Ben : Oh boy. I hope this museum is better than the last one. It was so boring I fell asleep

Carlos: Ben did you hear that? This museum has a real gold statue in there. 

Narrator : But behind them were Stefany and Emily, eavesdropping.

Emily : Really Carlos? You think it’s a real gold statue, ha dream on.

Stephanie: Emily’s right. It’s a fake gold statue. Just look at the newspaper. It looks fake.

Ben: Ok let’s just stop fighting and listen to the Teacher to see what group we’re in ok?.

Emily: FINE!!.

Stephanie: FINE!!.

Carlos: FINE!!. 

Narrator: So after five minutes the last group was called out.

Teacher: Ok and the last group is Emily and Stephanie.

Emily and Stephanie: Ya we’re in the same group.

Teacher: And  Ben and Carlos.

Emily and Stephanie: Nooooo!!

Ben and Carlos: nooooo!!

Teacher: Ok please go on the school bus and fill up from back to the front of the bus. Thank you.

Narrator : So one minute later the school bus was full except for two seats. Ben, Carlos, Emily, and Stephanie were all looking  at each other.

Ben : I call window seat. 

Carlos : No I do. 

Emily : No I do .

Stephanie : No I do.

Narrator : So they all race to the last two seats but as they’re all fighting over the last two seats the Teacher is looking at them and tells them off.

Teacher : Hey!! you  four stop fighting Emily, Stephanie, Ben, Carlos just sit down on the two seats there’s plenty of room for all four of you.

Narrator : One hour later after that long bus ride they finally got the the Museum of natural history and got off the school bus and got into their groups.

Teacher : Ok, you can go and look at anything you want to look at.

Ben : I want to look at the the golden statue to see if it’s real or not.

Emily : Ok let’s see it then.

Stephanie : But it’s up at the top floor. Are we really going all that way just to see if it’s real or not?.

Emily and Ben : Yes.

Stephanie : Ok.

Narrator : Then Emily, Ben, and Stephanie left Carlos behind and went straight to the golden statue to see if it was fake or not and then a minute later they got to the room of the golden statue.

Ben : Wow it looks so real.

Emily : Well will see it to believe it then.

Narrator : Then Ben puts his hand out and touches the golden statue and an alarm goes off and two security guards came running as fast as they can.

Security guard one : What happened here? Did one of you touch the statue?

Ben : No.

Stephanie : No.

Emily : No.                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                

Security guard two: Ok then.

Ben : But we did see a man. And he touched it.

Security guard one : Well do you know where he went?

Ben : Yes he went running towards the exit.

Security guard two : Ok maybe we can still go catch him in time.

Emily : Well you better go and get him then.

Security guard one : Ok then but stay out of trouble Ok?

Ben : Ok.

Emily : Ok 

Stephanie : Ok

Ben : So let’s see.

Narrator : Then Ben tries to touches it for the second time.

Ben : It feels heavy and really hard.

Emily : Ok I’ve got an app that if you take a picture it will tell you what it is.

Stephanie : Well what are you waiting for just do it.

Emily : Well ok.

Narrator : 3 minutes later the app finally finishes .

Ben : So is it real or not Emily?

Emily: It’s real.

Ben : Yes I was right in your face.

Stephanie : Ok guys we should be going now before we get caught.

Ben : Ok let’s go. 

Narrator : Then  when Ben takes his hand off the statue, the statue starts and shakes and falls and snaps in half onto the ground.

Emily and stephanie : What have you done Ben!!!.

Ben : Hey it’s not my fault plus this would not have happened if you did not eavesdrop on us.

Emily : No don't you drop this on us it’s Carlos’s fault, he’s the one who said there was a real gold statue.

Stephanie : Anyway where is Carlos?

Ben : I think he’s at the history centre.

Carlos asleep/ : snore, snore, snore.

Emily : Anyway we have to fix this up. Right? 

Ben : Ok let’s look through our bags to see if there’s any glue.

Narrator : After 7 several minutes looking for glue but they find nothing until Ben finds something. 

Ben : Hey guy’s look at what I found.

Emily : What is it?

Ben : Tooth paste.

Stephanie : And what do you have tooth paste for? 

Ben : I don’t know?

Emily : Well, maybe use the toothpaste and glue it back. 

Ben : Ok.

Stephanie : Ok.              

 Narrator : 1 hour later they finally finished.

Ben : Come on let’s get out of here.

Emily : Ok, but don’t forget Carlos, Ok?

Ben : Ok.

Stephanie : Ok.

News man : Breaking news, the golden statue has been broken and who ever did it tried to fix it with toothpaste and this has been  seven news.